User:Acdixon/Review

Lead:

• "It is named after Sydney Beanland, who first staked the mine site in the 1920s" I don't know what "staked" means in this context.
• "Gold and silver are the mine's primary commodities." Gold and silver were it's primary commodities, right? It isn't still active.

Background:

• "This was one of the most active prospecting and mining scenes in the Temagami area during the 20th century." The antecedent for "this" is unclear to me.
• "Beanland correlates with some of the earliest gold mining in the Temagami area" It is the opening of Beanland (an event) that correlates with the earliest gold mining, not the mine itself, right?
• "It was mined both as a primary and secondary product at surface and underground mines." Again, the antecedent is unclear for "it". The structure of the paragraph seems to indicate that "Beanland mine" is the antecedent, but I think it seems more likely that "gold" is meant to be the antecedent here. I might suggest rewriting the first two sentences as: "The opening of Beanland Mine correlates with some of the earliest gold mining in the Temagami area. Gold was mined both as a primary and secondary product at surface and underground mines in the area until the 1970s."
• "Consequently, Beanland is one of the earliest gold mines in Temagami along with Manitoba and Eastern, Cuniptau and Hermiston-McCauley mines." This sentence seems entirely redundant with the rest of the section. I'd just eliminate it.

Mine development:

• "Work began in September 1936 by Goodfish Mining Company Limited." What kind of work? Extraction of materials? Construction of buildings and infrastructure? Also wouldn't hurt to restate where the work began (i.e. "Goodfish Mining Company Limited began <Type of work> at Beanland Mine in September 1936.")
• Consider using the {{convert}} template for horsepower. Seems the appropriate SI unit to convert to is watts.
• "An average of 17 men was employed for the four months." This is the first mention of a four-month period that I see, so it doesn't seem appropriate to call it "the four months". I assume this is the amount of time it took to construct the buildings and infrastructure. Also, check with an expert on WP:MOSNUM, but I'm not sure it's good practice to mix numerals and spelled-out numbers in the same sentence like this.
• This business of incorporating has me confused. Goodfish Mining Company Limited incorporated as Beanland Mining Company Limited. Does this mean that Goodfish was an unincorporated company and Beanland was just the same company after incorporation?
• "Mining operations ceased on April 10, 1938." That was rather abrupt. Any idea why it ceased?

Mineral explorations:

• "Extensive surface work and diamond drilling was performed in 1934-1935" Hmm. This predates the unspecified "work" that Goodfish Mining Company began in September 1936. All the more reason to specify what that work was and how it differs from this.
• I'd wikilink "assayed". I had to look that up.
• "0.31 oz (8.8 g) of gold per ton and 1.8 oz (51 g) of silver per ton" I know we went over this with Big Dan Mine but some kind of comparison or context to help the reader determine whether this is a lot or a little material per ton would be really helpful.
• Since the mine, the man, and the company could be called "Beanland", it might be best to specify that Beanland Mining Company incorporated as Perron Gold Mines Limited in 1946. Also, since I'm not a business person, I don't understand why an incorporated company would need to incorporate again.
• "The mill results were not as high as expected." Not sure I understand this sentence. Was the gold concentration not as high as expected?
• "The cause of this was probably due to a deposit of silver hidden in the very high erratic values of gold and silver." I don't understand this sentence at all.
• "experienced a lot of dilution of ore due to overload of holes" Since I don't know what "overload of holes" means, it's hard to know what the cold had to do with it or why it diluted the ore. Is there a way to avoid the colloquial "a lot"?
• OK, it seems like the cold really fouled up all these tests. Was that a foreseeable outcome? If so, why did the company do them in January?

Regional terrane:

• Is "terrane" a variant of "terrain" that I'm not aware of? (entirely possible)
• As usual, the entire geology section is way over my head, so I can't really provide much feedback. If there is any way to explicitly connect the geologic features to the minerals found in the mine, that would be helpful for a novice reader, but I have no idea how feasible that is.

Overall, this article does a good job expounding on a subject that I suspect would be mostly or entirely neglected without your special interest in it (or maybe there is a large community of folks interested in abandoned Canadian mines; I don't know!) That in and of itself is commendable. Good luck should you decide to take this article through one of the Wikipedia review processes (GAC, PR, FAC, etc.) Acdixon ^{(talk · contribs)} 15:44, 31 October 2012 (UTC)